發(fā)個(gè)英一大作文模板，用好了上15沒(méi)問(wèn)題

litianpeng1 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 14:55

本帖最后由 litianpeng1 于 2012-12-22 17:11 編輯

Having captured our attention, the picture vividly describes that [描述圖片內(nèi)容]. Accordingly, what this far-reaching picture depicts a common phenomenon in today's society: [圖片所反映的寓意].

According to a recent survey conducted by the China Daily that our society has witnessed a dramatic increase[或者decline] in [某現(xiàn)象如globalization] during the last 10 years. This issue apparently has a profound impact on our everyday life. There are numerous reasons that why do we lay much emphasis upon this, and I would like to explore a few of the most important ones here. For one thing, [第一個(gè)理由]. For another, [第二個(gè)理由]. And above all, [第三個(gè)理由

Judging from what has been argued above, we have to recognize that it is high time we should take some effective measures to resolve the problem. Only by undergoing these measures, can we human beings live in harmony, and we will have a bright future.

chen2974 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 15:43

很多海文的痕跡

chen2974 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 15:44

what this far-reaching picture depicts a common phenomeno
少謂語(yǔ)啊

chen2974 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 15:47

According to a recent survey conducted by China Daily that our society has witnessed a dramatic increase[或者decline] in [某現(xiàn)象如globalization] during last 10 years.這個(gè)THAT怪怪的，貌似有問(wèn)題

chen2974 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 15:51

There are numerous reasons that why do we lay much emphasis upon this,
這個(gè)that貌似也有問(wèn)題....
建議樓主把語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤改了，貌似很多墨吹吹的痕跡，但樓主自由發(fā)揮了不少

litianpeng1 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 17:12

chen2974 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 15:51
There are numerous reasons that why do we lay much emphasis upon this,
這個(gè)that貌似也有問(wèn)題....
建議 ...

再看看，用軟件自動(dòng)改錯(cuò)和潤(rùn)色了下。

chen2974 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 18:17

litianpeng1 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 17:12
再看看，用軟件自動(dòng)改錯(cuò)和潤(rùn)色了下。

軟件靠不住的....
Accordingly,what this far-reaching picture depicts witnesses a common phenomenon in today's society:
上面是老墨那個(gè)模板里的句子，明顯你給人家把謂語(yǔ)去了
后面那兩個(gè)句子定語(yǔ)從句都是多了個(gè)引導(dǎo)詞
又看了看，we have to recognize，這里人家老師給的是we have come to realize，你這里改了以后感覺(jué)也怪怪的，原文人家是用的完成時(shí)態(tài)加了個(gè)have，你這里改了后中文就是“我們必須認(rèn)出”。
還有些你自己的表達(dá)，明顯跟模板句不搭，連我都能看出來(lái)別說(shuō)老師了.....

PS:碰巧我也看了墨老師的模板，我寫(xiě)這些只是覺(jué)得你的模板里的錯(cuò)誤句子有可能誤導(dǎo)大家，所以希望你把錯(cuò)誤的改過(guò)來(lái)，不要誤導(dǎo)其他人，沒(méi)別的意思

毛絿唲 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 21:27

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{:soso_e179:}支持6樓

花謝花飛花滿 · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-25 22:37

chen2974 發(fā)表于 2012-12-22 18:17
軟件靠不住的....
Accordingly,what this far-reaching picture depicts witnesses a common phenomenon ...

have to=must吧？我也不是很懂，是不是，不得不的意思？

jiuzhuanwuji · 發(fā)表于 2012-12-25 23:26

那個(gè)vividly都讓老師吐血了，你還用。。。

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