因暗戀女主持人，遂有感而發終于用英文寫了作文，請指教

李小壞 · 發表于 2011-12-6 16:26

lxhf0406 發表于 2011-12-6 08:13
what kind of suggestions do you want me to give you? I would not say you should revise sth. or add a ...

謝謝

李小壞 · 發表于 2011-12-6 16:27

wayne0520 發表于 2011-12-6 12:05
這主持人是誰

額，你是大色狼，俺就不告訴你！{:soso__17070086727174275949_4:}

sunpengiloveyou · 發表于 2011-12-6 20:39

李小壞發表于 2011-12-6 16:18
考研不能寫省略句么么？？

最好不要因為你不會省略有些地方不能省略的呵呵老師批改作文只是30秒的事情乍一看沒看清楚你寫的什么啊你說這個。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。

yuanzhenmao · 發表于 2011-12-7 00:53

本帖最后由 yuanzhenmao 于 2011-12-7 00:54 編輯

Admittedly, you are deft at integrating theory into practice, in other words, applying your language talents in writing this essay to the good looking female, which sparks my impulse to summit my comments.

Despite the fact that your lovable baby English is agreeable with enormous affections，

it proves to be difficult to the point of impossibility to acquire any admiration from those who is scheduled to grade your composition.

In a bid to gain favorable grades, richly refined, uphostered and elegant words shall prevail against the plain ones, even though the latter ones are more preferred by a good many westerners for their brevity and clarity.

李小壞 · 發表于 2011-12-7 08:01

yuanzhenmao 發表于 2011-12-7 00:53
Admittedly, you are deft at integrating theory into practice, in other words, applying your language ...

你的水平可以拿滿分了

canonbli · 發表于 2011-12-7 10:00

樓上某位的baby english比較恰當的形容了本文的水平，很多表達都有錯誤，更像是不知道怎么表達查了下字典硬套的

yuanzhenmao · 發表于 2011-12-7 10:41

本帖最后由 yuanzhenmao 于 2011-12-7 10:48 編輯

李小壞發表于 2011-12-7 08:01
你的水平可以拿滿分了

Were it not for the support furnished by the dictionary and google, which offered me an immense amount of guidence with respect to language usages , probably I would end up in even plainer infants' English.
Depression and desperation overwhems me whenever I have to consult the dictionary and the internet, both being not available in the examnation room.

Anyway, with 30 days still awaiting ahead, it is never too late to clear up the past and begin resolution.

Cheer up buddy, please accept my heartful encouragement.

By painstaking apprenticeship, your writing ability is bound to wittness a remarkable progress.

As the saying goes, helping others is to enjoy yourself. If there is any mistakes in what I had typed here, please feel free to inform me, for which I will be much obliged without feeling embarrassed.

···································································································Your sincerely
························································································A humble learner，young， simple， sometimes naive

李小壞 · 發表于 2011-12-7 22:38

canonbli 發表于 2011-12-7 10:00
樓上某位的baby english比較恰當的形容了本文的水平，很多表達都有錯誤，更像是不知道怎么表達查了下字典硬 ...

什么錯誤，請具體指出，以理服人！

canonbli · 發表于 2011-12-7 23:27

where I have a quarter of the origin of，沒見過這種表達；So instinctively，liked her voice very，very！instinctively基本上沒人用，后面半句沒主語，very much不是very
And compared her beauty；compared什么都沒有肯定錯的，一般用comparing with
后面rather跟prefer不能連著用，基本每句話都有錯誤，我不想一一指出了

李小壞 · 發表于 2011-12-8 00:06

canonbli 發表于 2011-12-7 23:27
where I have a quarter of the origin of，沒見過這種表達；So instinctively，liked her voice very，ver ...

where I have a quarter of the origin of，這個的確可能不對，但是我也不知道怎么說好。

instinctively基本上沒人用，是不是太夸張了！

后面半句沒主語那個，那個是允許省略的。但是考研最好不要省略是真的

compared her beauty 是肯定可以的，我專門咨詢過南非母語是英語的網友。

rather跟prefer不能連著用，這個我也不知道了……

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